Pen to paper
suicide on mind
writing out my sorro
but not enough time
where do you start
in justifying your end?
how do you explain it's your heart
you need to mend?
memories rush forward
tears flooding my eyes
i shouldnt have to choose
to say my final goodbyes.
too late to go back
as my weakness starts to show.
i have to hurry up.
it's time for me to go.
"mother and father
family and friends
this is my life
at its very end.
i know that its too late
to truly say what i feel.
understand that i am deeply sorry
for the years it'll take to heal.
i love each of you
from the bottom of my heart
but theres no choice
i relly must part.
my life has been pointless
and quite painful indeed.
what good am i alive
if i cant do one good deed?
so i leave you now
with thoughts of my past
trying to understand
just why i could not last.
I love you all
so very much
I wish each of you
the best of luck.
And never forget
no matter how angry you are
that I will always be looking over you
I'll never be far."















Comments
a few small nit-picky critiques (with being such an English freak):
"writing out my sorro"
*sorrow
"i relly must part."
*really
"if i cant do one good deed?"
*can't
also, you begin with a capitalization, and toward the end you begin capitalizing "I" again. but in the middle you don't capitalize anything. be consistant.
like I said though, overall it's a good poem - the feeling is definitely there.
--
"Corazon
No puedo dejar de pensar en ti
Como te necesito
Mi amor, como te extrao"
Dreaming of You -Selena
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